Saturday, September 24, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday

Bringing something new this week from a current WIP! 
Enjoy these six from "McKenzie Falls"...

She rounded the corner of the doorway to her bedroom and stopped dead in her tracks to find the shadowy silhouette of a man standing in front of her closed window.
All at once, the candle blew out. McKenzie gasped and instantly turned to run, but her feet twisted beneath her. Her voice seized, thwarting her attempt to scream. Only sparse puffs of air mixed with whimpering shrieks, nothing more than the hiss of a kitten, escaped her lungs.
McKenzie’s feet straightened and just as she reached the bedroom door, the figure from the window suddenly appeared in front of her, forcing her to come to an abrupt halt and stagger back. 

19 comments:

  1. very thrill packed 6 today- love the scene Robin

    Dawne P

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  2. Intriguing and thrilling all at once! And excellent description, honey. Love it!

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  3. Excellent draw into the scene:) Loved the "hiss of a kitten"...VERY good, gal:)

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  4. Great scene Ms. Robin. Very descriptive.

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  5. Her feet twisted beneather, her , I could feel that happening to me, too. Well done, Robin. Great, spooky six.

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  6. Run, McKenzie, run!! "nothing more than the hiss of a kitten" - oh, that's good!

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  7. Very descriptive and tense. Loved it.

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  8. Hehehe! I'm tickled to death y'all are liking the suspense... those darn sexy vampires will be all over this book... hmmm, you think McKenzie will catch one for herself? LOL!

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  9. That's what I like about books vs movie. I can visualize this scene in my mind and it was good. Absolutely loved it.

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  10. great six! very well written.
    Liz

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  11. Oooh, I love horror. Can't wait to see what happens.

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  12. Well done! She's in trouble. I can't wait to see what happens next! :)

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  13. Excellent tension...with each word you grabbed a hold and pulled me in. Nice six :)

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  14. An unexpected guest ... friend or foe? Intriguing.

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  15. Thanks everyone!! Now if I can just keep up the momentum!! LOL!

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